Readers Reviews/Comments On “Caught In A Bind”

(note: DC or Dead Cave is my pseudonym for when I wrote this novel and posted individual chapters on a discussion forum based on the tv show The Walking Dead)

Chapter 1.
Posted 25 October 2011 - 01:55 AM
Great start for our new fan-fiction forum. More to come from this story line I hope.

Posted 26 October 2011 - 01:57 PM
Awesome start DC....keep em coming!!!!

Posted 26 October 2011 - 03:28 PM
Excellent. I like how you gave us enough detail so the story and character make sense but didn't get bogged down before we got a little action. Looks like our hero is in a bit of a pickle! I'm off to part 2!

Posted 29 October 2011 - 10:37 AM
Very nice, DC. Your story reminds a bit of a story I read many moons ago entitled A Boy and his Dog.

Posted 05 December 2011 - 11:25 AM
I want MORE !!!
+1
Very nice work Dead Cave !!

Posted 08 December 2011 - 12:17 AM
I was here. Will spend time tonight reading. Reading is cool.

Posted 10 December 2011 - 11:34 PM
Very good DC.

I have been reading z fiction recently and your work stands up well with published stories... what I have read so far, is as good as a lot of the stories I have paid for.
Posted 15 December 2011 - 10:29 AM
I just discovered this very cool!

Posted 19 April 2012 - 03:40 PM
Dead Cave - I'm finally taking the time to check out your story. Enjoyed this first part.

Chapter 2

Posted 26 October 2011 - 03:25 PM
Love it. Had me on the edge of my seat. Maybe because I have worked on stripped screws before and I know what a hassle they can be. Good idea to whip out the pliers!

I like how the situation seems to get better, then gets worse. He makes it to the ladder, but whoops it's padlocked. Ok, the walkers can't reach the ladder..here comes tall boy! That's fine writing. Building suspense while at the same time keeping it real. And I like the main character's attitude.

More?

Chapter 3
Posted 27 October 2011 - 06:48 AM
I understand it takes time to write quality stories and you are just doing this for entertainment purposes...but don't leave us hanging on the roof.....LOL. Keep em coming!!

Posted 27 October 2011 - 04:14 PM
I hear ya Florida Walker. I felt like it was ME up on that ladder with a buncha dead heads nippin' at my heels! 'ol DeadCave really takes you there. And then leaves you on a roof! Surrounded by zombies! Not cool! Not cool!

Posted 27 October 2011 - 06:40 PM
DeadCave there are several places online that accept horror/zombie stories from freelance artists. I encourage you to look into it. Ya gotta start some where.

I don't see the katana as a stretch. I would have guessed you've had training based on how the character was using it. In other words no "So I swung my katana and chopped off 6 walkers heads in one stroke. Then I lit up a lucky. Ah, that mellow flavor". In Dead World everyone should have a melee weapon of some type. A person with zero training would probably be better off with a machete or a hatchet. But a katana isn't outrageous. Very possible.

Yeah I'm identifying with the character. I like the fact that he has no name. Well, not yet anyway. By not giving him a name it makes it that much easier for the reader to relate to the character. It's a nice technique. We may (or may not) find out his name later but by that time we've already "bonded" with the character if you will.

Posted 28 October 2011 - 06:03 AM
I also like that fact that you have gone out on your own and not followed the Rick/Shane/Lori et al....story. This is a different survivor with his own experiences.
I have read others fan fiction that was based on the GN. Yours is truly original.

Posted 01 December 2011 - 10:28 PM
Delicious! Consumed everything like a hungry walker!

Posted 05 December 2011 - 11:55 AM
very well done Dead Cave.
I really love reading part 2.
Special compliment for the details (loved the people dying in a tree story)

Posted 27 October 2011 - 06:44 PM
Uh oh! Who is this person? Friend? Foe? Big Boobed Blonde who didn't make it into Part 2? Stay tuned true believers! Same DeadCave Time. Same DeadCave Channel!!!!
Smashing a walker with an AC unit! Zombie kill of the week right there! LOL!
Not gonna say any more. You're gonna get a swelled head.

Posted 27 October 2011 - 07:37 PM
The golden shower was awesome. And very shall we say unusual. But c'mon a falling AC unit? That's too cool for the room.

Posted 28 October 2011 - 07:06 AM
The golden shower brings this into the realm of GN....where you could get away with so much more. Maybe next you could work on some zombie porn......LOL

Posted 28 October 2011 - 04:59 PM
Stay away from the movie Dead Girl. You wouldn't like it
But yeah zombie lovin' is probably a tad strong for around these parts. I respect your decision to just stick with pee. You are a gentleman and a scholar.

Hey, whose leg you gotta bite to get a Part 4 around here????


Posted 29 November 2011 - 11:40 PM
I think this is nice. You have talent. Keep writing!

Posted 01 December 2011 - 10:39 PM
Really nice writing. I was convinced and absorbed. I particularly liked the cut away where your principle compares sleeping on the roof to sleeping in a semi.

Posted 05 December 2011 - 12:13 PM
The golden shower was a very original approach and it works perfectly well.
Again, nice work

Posted 20 January 2012 - 11:37 PM

That's karma. Bring back that stinky urine walker.
Boss was here, had to stop for a little, but back for more.

Posted 19 April 2012 - 06:27 PM
Thumbs up!! Good read, so far!

Chapter 4
Posted 29 October 2011 - 05:17 PM
Adding a deaf character to the mix adds all sorts of possibilities.


I'm also digging how the characters only use their weapons when absolutely necessary. While a Tallahassee type character is exciting to watch in reality someone like that probably wouldn't be around too long once the dead started getting all uncool and heavy. Stealth is more likely to aid in survival rather than brute force.


And could a romance be building? Boom chica wow wow!

Posted 02 December 2011 - 05:42 AM
At the risk of sounding sycophantic - you have quite a talent and I'm eager to read more. I remember you mentioned you read Steven King's - The Stand as much as I do. Any chance you were subconsciously influenced by "Nick" with your choice to include a deaf character? Haha! At least you were not as Cruel as King was when he put Nick with Tom Cullen who can't read or sign!

Posted 21 January 2012 - 12:36 AM
Love the reading.

Is the answer most all convenience stores have newspaper stands inside their stores? And the windshield wiper stands, you wont find them in a convenience store?

Chapter 5

Posted 31 October 2011 - 01:36 PM
Awesome story!!! Keeps me reading everyday! Please keep it going!

Posted 06 December 2011 - 01:49 PM
I'll vote AAA

Posted 19 December 2011 - 04:02 PM
Wasn't sure what a Guilly suit was. Good flow to the story.
also in the line
"I didn't get the impression that she didn't trust her son but as the adage goes, two are always better than one."
is there something missing? reads funny to me.

Chapter 6

Posted 03 November 2011 - 07:20 AM
Another good read DC....I read this at work and I got another of my co-workers into your story.......you are getting a following...LOL

Posted 21 January 2012 - 01:50 AM
Super read, on to part 7.

Chapter 7
Posted 03 November 2011 - 05:59 PM
DeadCave, good writing, have been enjoying reading your stories. Hope you keep them coming. Good job.

Posted 03 November 2011 - 07:29 PM
We got names and some back story. I figured she was military.
I like how you're handling the deaf son. My sister is a special education teacher. Put simply she works with deaf children who are intellectually challenged. She also teaches sign language to the parents of deaf children. She signs like a maniac, exactly how you are describing it. I also caught that was the correct sign for "Thank you". My sister has taught me the basics. I don't sign fluently but I can get by. Especially since much of it is facial expression and abbreviated terms.

Posted 04 November 2011 - 06:59 AM
You can't go "balls to the wall" in every post....there has to be some down time to keep it real.
I believe in the GN they talked about the cold weather slowing the geeks down. I haven't read where any weather killed them or any amount of time decomposed them. But it is your story and as a writer you can take it in any direction you like.

Posted 04 November 2011 - 04:09 PM
Usually I would be whining about the lack of zombies. But this is such a good read I almost don't miss them. Almost

Posted 02 December 2011 - 02:05 PM
Really nice chapter. When I first started reading I found myself asking why you'd write first person with John's character but it's really making sense now. I there might be some layers to that onion that will be fun to peel.

Chapter 8

Posted 07 November 2011 - 05:43 PM
I like all the details but I gotta admit I'm looking forward to Tarzan leaving the tree

Chapter 9

Posted 08 November 2011 - 08:32 AM
DC...the book comes out when???? Another good read. Maybe a little too technical for the non-military readers, but you explain it well. I look forward to a daily read. *****Warning******* spoil us with daily writing and we will begin to expect more...LOL

Posted 08 November 2011 - 04:56 PM
I'll add that I enjoy reading your work DC. I will keep reading as long as you keep writing.

Posted 08 November 2011 - 05:00 PM
I remember watching King Kong as a kid. There's this big moment when the gates open and Kong is revealed for the first time. As you hear him pounding through the woods you get that feeling in your stomach. That feeling of the shit is about to get real.

“Somewhere out there a herd was headed our way.”

That line gave me that feeling. Bravo, DC. Bravo.
I'm following the tech stuff ok. I'm not a military person but I've read/watched enough violent movies that I have some idea what you're talking about. Although, like you, I had no idea what a M-86 was. Insidious little device isn't it?
This was a very exciting read. I can't wait to see what they get up to next.
And folks who are reading this don't be afraid to pipe up. DC is laying it all on the line here. If you're shy even a simple "Nice job" will do. And if you don't like it and feel the need to critique I'm sure DC would appreciate that as well as long as it's done in a rational, intelligent manner. "This sucks, dude" will be quickly deleted and I will release George on you

Posted 10 November 2011 - 03:17 PM
Awesome DC!! I check for new writing everyday! Can't wait to see how it goes down, keep up the great work buddy!

Posted 10 November 2011 - 08:04 PM
DC as i have stated before in some of the other Caught In a Bind story lines, Good Read keep up the good work.

Posted 28 November 2011 - 04:36 AM
Interesting story I'm going to go start from the beginning.

Posted 02 December 2011 - 02:43 PM
Thank you DC. You're very industrious and your characters are pitched very nicely. You make me want to know what they are going to do and say next. Like your 'voice' too, very easy to read. Some stuff I had to look up - M-86 had me vexed and ATV didn't Anglicise too well, we say quad bike or quad. No harm done though, still enjoyed the escape.

Posted 19 April 2012 - 09:38 PM
Wow, great job, DC! I don't mind the technical stuff - you explain it well.
BTW, I liked the 'getting to know you' quieter chapters, as well. I really enjoyed getting to know a bit about the characters, and liked that we had to wait until it was natural to learn about out protagonist. Since it's written from his POV, I think it could have come across as egotistical, to listen to him spout off about himself too much. Plus, it made us want it more.
Good stuff.

Chapter 10

Posted 15 November 2011 - 07:03 AM
Come on peeps no replies??? We need to encourage DC is we want more, and I certainly want more!!! Keep up the great work DC!!!! Awesome read as always!!!!

Posted 15 November 2011 - 08:45 AM
I like the addition of this Col guy. I'm wondering where we go from here.
Know what we need though? That's right
I know..I know...be patient....fiddlesticks.

Posted 17 November 2011 - 09:58 AM
caught in A bind is a success! carry on man! I'm addicted.

Posted 17 November 2011 - 01:12 PM
Enjoying the story DeadCave. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 02 December 2011 - 03:14 PM
Good going DC. I'm still reading and still interested to learn more of your tale.

Posted 02 December 2011 - 11:06 PM
I'm hooked.
It's a fun read and I care about the characters.
John's voice is distinct and informal in a way that I think blends well with the setting and circumstances of his life.
You've done very well I think.
If you keep writing I'll keep reading.

Chapter 11

Posted 20 April 2012, 08:26 AM
I found myself getting chills when I read this little bit:
Presumably this man was her husband, long dead, killed somewhere outside of Baghdad a long time ago. In all of those pictures Maggie was the picture of happiness. I wondered for a moment when was the last time she was that happy. Probably like everyone else left alive on the planet, before the outbreak of the dead. Frank's voice calling to me from the kitchen broke me out of my musing and I stepped on out of the bedroom to have lunch.
It's the second time that has happened, so far. You are doing a good job of bringing some emotion into it that feels real. I'm enjoying John's musings, and I like how they are short and not drawn out, since it seems there wouldn't always be much time for contemplation, and even more, one wouldn't always want to let their mind wander into the past and think too much about the way things were. I like it.

Chapter 12

Posted 18 November 2011 - 08:36 PM
DeadCave, i have read all 12 kudos to you keep up the good writing. Have really enjoyed them all and look forward to each addition to your series.

Posted 27 March 2012 - 02:15 AM
Awesome read,

Chapter 13

Posted 03 January 2012 - 01:56 PM
I nodded to my reflection in the mirror, staying with this woman and her son was a good idea after all. Little did I know, how so little did I know.
this line is ominous...

Posted 20 April 2012, 03:12 PM
Anyway, I'm certain that I got tingly, choked up, etc. at all the right moments. Very well done!

Chapter 14
Posted 20 November 2011 - 08:17 AM
I think I wet my knickers

Posted 21 November 2011 - 08:41 AM
DC,
Best chapter yet!!! The action was fierce but not overdone. I felt as if I was in the middle of all the excitement. Awesome read!!!!

Posted 21 November 2011 - 06:43 PM
This is probably my second favorite chapter. I think my favorite was the one where John was hanging from that freakin' ladder with the zombies clutching at him from down below and he's using that little tool to try to open the hatch and more zombies keep comin' in and this one time at band camp....

Ok so I rambled. I love that chapter.

Posted 21 November 2011 - 07:04 PM
DC, great action, great read

Chapter 15
Posted 30 November 2011 - 06:47 PM
Hey man, I've been reading this stories for long before joining (I'm new today!!!!!) and i have to say I am hooked.... Great job!!! keep em coming.

Posted 03 December 2011 - 10:34 AM
Something has to keep you coming back, and money probably isn't (ultimately) what it should be.
I'm not going to lie DC, you've got a kind of Bohemian mythos working right now - Starving artist, struggling to be discovered.
If you do find happiness in a new job... keep it to yourself.
Build the legend.

Chapter 16
Posted 03 January 2012 - 03:07 PM
liked the action in this chapter.

Chapter 17

Posted 01 December 2011 - 07:23 PM
I'm enjoying your forum novel fwiw. Great work diversion.

Posted 02 December 2011 - 04:19 PM
DC, you post chapter 18 just as soon as you're ready. I'll enjoy reading it. Take your time. You've got me hooked on your story. Nice work.

Posted 03 December 2011 - 12:33 AM
MORE!!!!!!!! I'm hooked

Chapter 18
Posted 03 December 2011 - 11:03 PM
Very nice DC. I did enjoy reading the latest installment. I'm cursing you a little leaving it on a cliffhanger like that - writers prerogative and I'll thank you all the more for the next installment when it comes. I noted the link for the HK416 but ironically I had a pretty good idea what that one was having handled a HK417 (larger caliber & can be drum fed being the only real difference). I liked the way you handled John's surprise at the weapon and Maggie's explanation. Felt very natural to read. Thank you sir!

Posted 04 December 2011 - 03:08 PM
As always DC good read, and a cliff hanger.

Posted 05 December 2011 - 08:06 AM
Another entertaining read DC.......I appreciate the distraction from work.


Chapter 19

Posted 06 December 2011 - 02:03 PM
Another cliff hanger DC.....I'm gonna hunt you down and belly slap you silly........LOL

Posted 06 December 2011 - 05:12 PM
WOW

Posted 06 December 2011 - 08:10 PM
Nicely done sir. Not much time this week for chit-chat but I'd be doing myself a disservice had I of not read this. Thanks again and I note that you have your very own topic. Well deserved!

Posted 06 December 2011 - 08:57 PM
I'm actually a bit surprised by the decisions being made here. Ya always keep me guessing DC. Things are about to get ugly me thinks.

Posted 07 December 2011 - 09:43 AM
Wow, keeps me on edge for sure! As always, awesome reading. Thanks again DC!


Chapter 20
Posted 08 December 2011 - 11:06 AM
You have some great writing skills DC, you should write a book! Your writing keeps me checking here everyday for the next chapter! I'll be looking forward to the next one as always!

Posted 08 December 2011 - 12:35 PM
Lots of action in this one!!! The twist of James going off the deep end is going to be interesting for our hero. Another great read DC....thanks!!!

Posted 08 December 2011 - 09:49 PM
Delightful carnage

Posted 09 December 2011 - 08:53 PM
Really good read! Enjoyed that very much indeed. I thought the action was well paced and the tension between your groups of the living worked well. Will be waiting for the next installment with anticipation.

Chapter 21

Posted 15 December 2011 - 07:41 AM
I hope the Sniper is friendly.

Posted 15 December 2011 - 02:42 PM
Just caught up with this latest installment. As always really have enjoyed reading your latest. I particularly liked the Colonel's (who has become more like Frank to me now). account of how James and Maggie got to him. The sniper is a nice touch, regardless of where this goes it serves to tantalize me as to another thread that could be picked up later, or not....

I think letting Maggie and John simmer on the back burner during this installment was the best way to write it as it not only (as already mentioned) developed John's and Maggie's back story but put some flesh on the bones of the relationship developing between John and Frank. Nice work sir. Keep writing!

Posted 15 December 2011 - 03:52 PM
Agreed. The sniper is a good hook, even if we never hear from him again. I'm left wondering whether he/she will be a ruthless killer, harm the group in some way, or become an asset. The important thing is I'm left wondering.

And John and Maggie, James and Frank, all of their problems are nicely complicated in the face of a greater threat. A constant threat, that they lose sight of sometimes as they struggle through human issues.

Good stuff.

Chapter 22

Posted 16 December 2011 - 09:36 AM
Well done DC, another nice installment to the story. I felt you were tidying up from last time and setting things up for next time. A nice interlude because of the trepidation that John had and his encounter with the former hunter, now walker. Great description of the walker by the way, said enough to be taken in with a glance without labouring it. I felt I could almost hear those jaws still snapping as John settled his weight over the pummel of his blade to drive home the killing blow.

Had a good laugh at "At least I wouldn't come back as a zombie... or a sparkly vampire I chortled to myself" - Very droll! I actually got more of a feeling for John from this touch of humour and his thought process about the painting he'd recalled. Exactly the same thing happens to me!

Keep writing

Pete

Posted 16 December 2011 - 10:32 AM
Just wanted to chime in that I am still enjoying your story. Seeing a new installment posted always brightens my morning.

Posted 16 December 2011 - 08:30 PM
Very good DC, i was waiting to see if some of the Hunters reanimated, and sure enough they did. I remember one of the shotgun guys was shot in the chest and the other in the head. Still waiting to hear more from the sniper, interesting angle that he took out a Z and left the hero alone.

Posted 18 January 2012 - 08:51 AM
Nice. I'm enjoying this segment of the story.


Chapter 23

Posted 18 December 2011 - 07:00 AM
Thanks for another excellent installment to Caught In A Bind. The more you reveal (or hint at) John's past the more I like him. I felt educated and entertained as I now know the ASL sign for "hungry" although I must admit I'd probably 'overcook' the facial expression leaving me, I assume, somewhat comedic looking!

I'm really enjoying your character portrayals, they are not "cookie cutter". All the characters seem effected by the motion of the ocean, if I can put it that way. I don't know if I'm right or not but I felt there was a chunk of self-editorial that went on during this instalment. There was more that you said regarding the "difficult to lie to" section but how you did it worked well enough for me. Succinct and to the point so no complaints, just an observation as I've got used to the usual flow of your style.

Anyway, do keep them coming. My only complaint is that you don't seem to write as fast as I read, hahah!

All the best

Dodger

Posted 19 December 2011 - 11:01 AM
Just got to reading parts 22 & 23......really am enjoying the attention to detail. I find myself being "educated", thinking...."damn, that is a good idea. I would never have thought to act like that in that situation". If a Z-poc ever does happen, I will be safer due to the knowledge you are imparting on me DC....LOL

Posted 22 January 2012 - 07:13 AM
Super read, lovin' it.

Chapter 24
Posted 20 December 2011 - 06:34 PM
As always great read DC. Am anxiously awaiting to see what the note says, and waiting to hear what Frank found in the dead guys wallet. Definitely thought the dead guy was the sniper until the last paragraph.

Posted 20 December 2011 - 07:45 PM
Don't apologies for the length of that installment. Was nice to get my 'teeth' into your story. Typically you raised as many new questions as you answered new ones which I have come to expect from you. I did like how you played with the expectation that your mystery sniper character was dead, killed by Frank and then led gently along to find the note on the wind shield. Marvelous!

I'm getting a real feel and some affection for your principles now, even though it's through John's eyes. John is becoming more and more intriguing, his pack still puzzles me when mentioned and now the reason for not revealing the note compounds my interest in what you've NOT said about him. Imagination going wild here. I know you won't disappoint when you reveal.

Fully expect you to be rather busy over the holiday season so I'll watch for anything you do post but won't expect anything. Everyone needs a little break right?

I've been wondering about climate, season etcetera. I've got an idea of terrain in my head of a wide well made road threading it's way through wide, lightly forested, gently rolling hills. Bet I'm far from the mark but just out of curiosity, how did I do?


Posted 21 December 2011 - 07:38 AM
I loved the misdirection with the visitor/sniper, and the note is killing me. What did he say? Is Maggie Pregnant?!

Excellent read.

Posted 21 December 2011 - 09:04 AM
I'm loving it!!!! So many things going that keeps you wondering! Now he has to worry about being infected along with keeping his group safe. The description of the intruder into the camp was awesome, I swear I could smell that stink breath from here!!! Ha Ha! I love the attention to detail that brings you right into the story! Great reading DC! Merry Christmas!

Posted 21 December 2011 - 09:43 AM
So the redneck's wallet/ID had something in it that was enough to piss Frank off. Could be a military ID? Also I wonder if that note conveyed to John that the sniper was still alive...but how. I guess the sniper is a lone wolf. I know if it was me I would prefer being on my own. Yeah no one to watch my back, but also no one to mess things up. Less supplies needed etc...

Maybe we will all be better prepared for 12/21/12 now...LOL

Posted 22 January 2012 - 06:31 PM
Read this off a print out and loved every part. I also could smell that stink mouth. Great work DeadCave.

Chapter 25
Posted 23 December 2011 - 08:36 AM
Great, not only do our heroes have to worry about the undead, now they have a psycho stalking them. And a trained one at that. Too late for John to do the honorable think and leave to keep the group safe.....remember the best defense is a strong offense. Our group should give crapbag a taste of his own medicine (and make sure he suffers till death)!!!


Posted 23 December 2011 - 03:42 PM
DC, was curious on what the sniper was up to. Just wonder why the sniper didn't take him out when he clearly had the chance to do it and took out the Z instead, I'm sure the sniper did not miss his intended target. I am guessing the psychological aspect of it with the note and too let his victim know he was coming for him. As always great read.

Posted 28 December 2011 - 02:35 PM
Great work DC. As always I enjoyed your latest installment. I don't have a great deal of time to comment but you should know that I'm a very happy reader. I like what you're doing with the story and I feel it's moving at a good pace. You've a rather nice habit if dropping a few more elements into the mix that make me want to read the next installment. Keep writing man! Happy holidays!

Posted 11 May 2012  -07:38 AM
Well, truth is I read the last few chapters back to back because I was so enthralled, was up late reading it, damn you
I guess when I got done with this one I just kind of made the comment that was freshest in my mind because I was tired.

But really, I don't have much criticism, it's really very very good. Seriously, when you get the typos nailed down and the grammar tightened up (not that it's bad, but you know everybody makes a few mistakes here and there), this will read just like any New York Times Best Seller, I'm serious about that. You've got serious talent for story telling and a great sense of proportion with enough detail to paint a vivid picture but enough of the big picture to keep perspective on the overall situation.

I've never seen a star being born right before my eyes, until now.

Chapter 26

Posted 05 January 2012 - 10:10 AM
Nice chapter......you kept us interested without any action. Kudos to you and the story you are creating

Posted 05 January 2012 - 05:36 PM
As always DC two thumbs up. I was starting to have a twinge of withdrawal pains.


Posted 07 January 2012 - 08:00 AM
Great chapter. I was still on the edge of my seat, even though they appear 'safe'. Loving the whole story, completely addicted, can't wait for 27.
Ur the whole reason I became a member to say 'keep up the good work'!
BitBrit.

Posted 18 January 2012 - 10:05 AM
Finally caught up. Now I have to wait... awwww.

Posted 18 January 2012 - 04:16 PM
I read it all last week, and was addicted. Great story, I could picture the action in my mind while reading it.

Chapter 27

Posted 20 January 2012 - 10:45 AM
DC,
Thanks fo r another fine chapter. I was afraid we wouldn't hear from our survivors again. I understand the effort that has to be put into a story like yours and that effort is greatly appreciated.

Posted 20 January 2012 - 04:15 PM
Woohoo! Another installment. Great as always. Nice decon processes too. The attention to detail is really good, very easy to envisage.

Posted 20 January 2012 - 06:05 PM
As always great read DC. Thank you sir.

Chapter 28

Posted 02 February 2012 - 10:27 AM
Yeah this place is a little ominous. When a place is run by a computer it never turns out well.
But it could be a really nice safe haven.
Only thing that I was confused by was the mention of a car. Then I realized you were talking about the elevator.

Posted 02 February 2012 - 07:40 PM
DC , don't know what to say here. You keep looking for criticism on your writing, and i can't really give you any. Your writing is good in my humble opinion. As you know i have read all your writings, and enjoy them. The descriptiveness that you use is outstanding. I can associate with all your main characters. In part 28 just like in all the other parts of your writing, i can actually picture myself there. I felt like i was walking up the corridors with the main characters, getting in and out of the elevators, and sitting in that conference room with them. I could picture the walkers behind the bullet proof glass. I may have seen a spelling error or grammatical error here or there but i was so blown away i don't remember where they were. Keep up the good work DC, IMHO you have a future in writing.

Posted 03 February 2012 - 01:05 PM
Very good DC! You could wrap this all up in a book and sell it! People are looking for these types of stories! Very creative and descriptive, like the Walkin Dude, I feel like I am in the story. Please keep up the great work!

Posted 03 February 2012 - 01:54 PM
Newb here. Just stumbled upon this story and I am blown away. You definitely have me hooked on the story. Now I have to go back and read all the parts. Keep up the great work and I am definitely going to share this site and your story with others.

Peace!

Posted 05 February 2012 - 12:17 AM
well done my friend .. two walker thumbs up .. literally i just cut em off, two different walkers to b precise, and am holding them way up .

Chapter 29

Posted 23 February 2012 - 08:24 AM
Thought I'd chime in again and say I'm still enjoying your story. Kudos for keeping us entertained!

Posted 01 March 2012 - 04:33 AM
This night I was here too. Loved every part. Looking forward to what comes next.


Chapter 30

Posted 04 March 2012 - 07:22 PM
Wow DC Excellent read, had me really going not realizing it was a dream sequence.
Good writing sir.

Posted 05 March 2012 - 03:25 AM
But were they dreams or premonitions?....

Posted 06 March 2012 - 09:12 AM
A dream within a dream within a dream. Some inception sh!t going on there.


Chapter 31

Posted 12 March 2012 - 12:13 PM
DC, Top notch story. I could almost feel myself behind the glass looking at the walkers. Nice plot twists too. Really enjoying your writing.

Posted 14 March 2012 - 06:17 PM
A nice read. Nothing too gory before bed! I'm guessing the calm before the storm....

Posted 14 March 2012 - 07:32 PM
DC as always excellent really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work

Posted 15 March 2012 - 09:45 AM
Cool "Day of the Dead" feel here with the Dr. Frankenstein-esque experiments. I'd say they're pretty well screwed if the computer goes kaput or the AI decides to get cranky. Nice work.

Chapter 32

Posted 24 March 2012 - 03:07 PM
Excellent DC. Looking forward to the escape.

Posted 24 March 2012 - 05:50 PM
Seems like Ellis and the boyfriend could be walker bait on the surface. Hint, hint.

Chapter 33

Posted 10 April 2012 - 07:47 AM
Great set up for things to come. Nice long chapter, but kept my interest with all the detail. IDK if I would be so quick to want to leave such a safe place...but then again, safety is only a frame of mind.

Posted Yesterday, 01:55 PM
It builds...

Chapter 34

Posted 19 April 2012 - 06:49 AM
awesome!! can't wait for the next chapter

Posted 19 April 2012 - 08:13 AM
Nowhere, GN's or the TV show, has a scratch been deadly. Wonder how dangerous the world of DC is?

Posted 19 April 2012 - 03:38 PM
Well worth the wait!

Posted 19 April 2012 - 05:02 PM
Excellent DC, last 2 chapters have been fast moving. Good job.

Posted Yesterday, 02:17 PM
So then I guess James is infected.

Great chapter.

RIP Frank (and Ellis).

Posted Yesterday, 05:28 PM
*applauds*

That was absolutely fantastic. It had me at the edge at my seat, and I couldn't stop reading. I'm excitedly awaiting the next installment.
Great job, DC!

Posted 20 April, 07:40 PM
I am so hooked to this story. You are doing an awesome job and I can't wait to read more. I usually find I hold my breath through most of your action filled chapters. So sad about Frank; he was a good guy. You really have me on the edge of my seat with this sniper storyline and I think James is probably my favorite character. You could easily get a work like this published as long as you kept the official Walking Dead characters out of it.
And I think I remember reading a comment/question from another thread where you asked about copyright. Anything that you write or draw and post online you are the sole owner of. It is already copyrighted and as long as you have the manuscript or work saved on a disk or on paper then you are safe and should someone steal your story, you will have the right to file a lawsuit.
I do have a comment about James being scratched. I don't think scratches infect them. Rick told Shane that the officers at the school must have gotten infected from scratches because he wasn't exactly sure about the fact that everybody is infected. And he didn't want to admit that secret yet. It's my belief that they died and then turned because they were already infected as is everyone. And once Rick saw it happen with Shane, he knew what Jenner had told him was indeed true. But who knows, that's just my take on it. I'm sure others may think something completely different.
I can't wait for your next update. I probably check back everyday to see if you have posted one. Don't make us wait too long and thanks for the wonderful read!

Posted 23 March 2012 - 07:15 PM
I've been an avid reader since childhood. My favorites being Stephen King and Dean Koontz. The Dark Tower series being my favorite. I will always call a spade a spade and have not enjoyed every offering I've read. But I gotta say your story has been one of the most enjoyable reads I've experienced in a long time. I came across it by being a fan of the Walking Dead and looking for a fan forum to read and discuss different opinions. I found the fan stories through a link and accidentally read chapter eleven first and was hooked immediately. As far as I'm concerned the producers of the Walking Dead should fire every writer on staff ASAP and hire you to continue the story line. The way you paint the picture makes me feel like I'm there going through every trial and tribulation as well as the moments of joy. Reading this has been the highlite of my evenings the last three or four days. Please keep me informed of where to read any other stories you have written or intend to write. Consider me a hardcore follower and PLEASE come on Part 33.I'm sitting on stand by and I don't know how long I can last without reading more of your work. Well done my friend,well done.

Thank You,

 Posted 20 January 2012 - 10:59 AM
 DC,
Your story is very detailed, but it keeps me interested. You do not bore with that detail and it makes me the reader feel as if I am actually there. I can not find fault with your work. As a good writer, you mix up action with periods of detail and also leave open threads to be visited later. I have no opinion on which way you should go with this story, as I am enjoying the direction it is going in now. Honestly I have no complaints and am thoroughly enjoying it and look forward to new chapters. I even have a few "lurkers" here at work reading it also.


 Posted 21 January 2012 - 04:37 AM
I see a love story just around every chapter part I read. Will save reading chapter part 13 and the rest tonight. As for me will be sleeping in five hours from now. Also, everything seems real to me and I like it.


 Posted 21 January 2012 - 11:34 AM
I've read the last two chapters .. definitely good .. imo, zombie survival works so well, because tho there is an underlying story for characters, anyone can jump in at any junction in the story and be interested .. i dont really need to know what happened before this moment, i just jumped into a story where people are trying to survive and make due with what's left .. i mean we all know the circumstances and the situation, it's nice to see how different people play that out ..


with that said, maybe I'm lazy, so i wont be reading the other 25 chapters lol, but it's nice to be able to jump right in .. and i know if i stop for a while, then jump in a couple chapters from now, i might miss some of the story, but i will still be caught in the moment ..

props where they are deserved .. good writing ..

Posted 22 January 2012 - 04:24 PM
 I have been completely hooked since finding it over Christmas. Un-put-downable. I like the way u provide cliff hangers, but provide enough answers in each chapter to keep me reading.


I'll read any genre but haven't read horror since teens, due to my ability to envisage the story, but am truly loving this.


The last author to get me this hooked was the Lincoln Rhyme books (not sure if u consider it a compliment, but its meant as one!)

BB

Posted 04 February 2012 - 07:44 PM

DC , don't know what to say here. You keep looking for criticism on your writing, and i can't really give you any. Your writing is good in my humble opinion. As you know i have read all your writings, and enjoy them. The descriptiveness that you use is outstanding. I can associate with all your main characters. In part 28 just like in all the other parts of your writing, i can actually picture myself there. I felt like i was walking up the corridors with the main characters, getting in and out of the elevators, and sitting in that conference room with them. I could picture the walkers behind the bullet proof glass. I may have seen a spelling error or grammatical error here or there but i was so blown away i don't remember where they were. Keep up the good work DC, IMHO you have a future in writing.


Posted 06 February 2012 - 07:51 PM
Just finished reading all of the parts and now I can see why everyone is blown away with the story. If I were you I would be lookin for a literary agent to sell your writings as a book. The detail and the character development are really good! Hopefully you keep writing and don't develop a major brain cramp.

Peace!

 Posted 30 September 2012 - 08:59 PM  DC, you really have a gift, and I hope life allows you to continue to write. I'm especially impressed with the way you are able to write personal relationships in a way that makes them seem so very natural. I can't even count the number of times that I choked up as I was reading. The book was extremely well paced and exciting. Had it been a book I could hold, I wouldn't have put it down until I finished, but as it is, I really hate reading on the computer, so it took me a while to get through.